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E-Portfolio: Descriptive writing

Learning Objectives:

Level 3

• Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
• Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
• Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.
• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.

Level 4.

• Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
• Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
• Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.
• Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.

Learning goals:

• To ‘Show, Don’t Tell’ the reader by painting a picture with words.
• A variety of sentence starters
• A variety of sentence lengths
• Edit and rework
• Effective peer checking and feedback

The suffocating harness gets the hold of me like I'm being crushed by two concrete walls squeezing against me. When it was my turn to go up for my solo and I got to the top and the view was exceptional. The  rows and rows of the purple vibrant grape paddocks and the distant splashes from the waterslide. 

As my feet touched the soft mooshy soil I boomed "that was the best time ever."! So the suffocating harness came off and then it was morning tea hurray!




So that was my tree climbing experience.

  

Student Reflection: In my writing, one of my goals is Proofread for spelling and punctuation mistakes. I did/(did not)show this goal here because I didn't show this because I don't know enough about this goal to do it. In my writing, one of my goals is Re-craft writing to improve it for an audience. t I did/(did not)show this goal here because I didn't show this because i don't know enough about this goal to do it and this kind of writing isn't the right kind of writing to do it. My next step is To ask a teacher to show me an example of them so I can get them signed off. Teacher Comment: Josh, I like the way that you have used a range of descriptive language to show what you were seeing. You were able to paint a clear picture in my head. Your next step is to edit your work and check for spelling mistakes. Miss Hurley.

passion project 1